Well done Sara. A good use of this week’s prompt. I liked some of the descriptive words you used in here. I liked the sentence about the shimmering sunlight glaring gracefully through the pond. To improve this work I would take more time to carefully edit your work. Perhaps ask your teacher for help with speech marks. Remember a new line for a new speaker. Sometimes you opened the speech marks but forgot to close them. Good job and keep writing creatively.
Mr Fitzpatrick
100 Word Challenge Team
Hobart, Tasmania, Australia
Well done Sara. A good use of this week’s prompt. I liked some of the descriptive words you used in here. I liked the sentence about the shimmering sunlight glaring gracefully through the pond. To improve this work I would take more time to carefully edit your work. Perhaps ask your teacher for help with speech marks. Remember a new line for a new speaker. Sometimes you opened the speech marks but forgot to close them. Good job and keep writing creatively.
Mr Fitzpatrick
100 Word Challenge Team
Hobart, Tasmania, Australia
Thank you very much for commenting on my work. I really appreciate it, I have another story coming. Maybe you could see my monolouges?
From Sara.