Was this post for the fairy tale prompt? I’m guessing it was as I can see some similarities to fairy tale stories. I like how you began and ended your writing in a traditional way for fairy tales, yet the story has a very modern twist! I like how you have used adverbial phrases to begin some of your sentences (such as ‘To her surprise’ and ‘A little later’) and I can see that you know how to use speech punctuation.
Just a little bit of advice: check for any missing capitals and check your spellings in the middle of writing, as I was unsure what a couple of words were.
Keep writing for your blog and sharing your creative ideas!
With thanks,
Mrs Ward
KOBPS, Lincolnshire
Hello Zia,
Was this post for the fairy tale prompt? I’m guessing it was as I can see some similarities to fairy tale stories. I like how you began and ended your writing in a traditional way for fairy tales, yet the story has a very modern twist! I like how you have used adverbial phrases to begin some of your sentences (such as ‘To her surprise’ and ‘A little later’) and I can see that you know how to use speech punctuation.
Just a little bit of advice: check for any missing capitals and check your spellings in the middle of writing, as I was unsure what a couple of words were.
Keep writing for your blog and sharing your creative ideas!
With thanks,
Mrs Ward
KOBPS, Lincolnshire