Some lovely vocabulary here – screeched, a towering crow – they really created an atmosphere. Well done for using a bit of a flashback technique too. You created suspense well with your short sentences, although I would have liked a final sentence to suggest where the story was going to go rather than just ‘Then…’ I enjoyed reading it though – keep it up!
Wow great story prithikaa your story really left me in suspense
Jayanna:)
Wow Prithikaa! That is wonderful! I wonder what happens next. Keep Calm and Write!
Some lovely vocabulary here – screeched, a towering crow – they really created an atmosphere. Well done for using a bit of a flashback technique too. You created suspense well with your short sentences, although I would have liked a final sentence to suggest where the story was going to go rather than just ‘Then…’ I enjoyed reading it though – keep it up!