Hello Zainab.What an intriguing piece of writing. I liked how you drew us I to the story and then left us wanting more ! Be careful to check your punctuation as some of your sentences are a bit long.To improve your writing, try to vary your sentence openers rather than using the first person so often. Well done.
Hello Zainab.What an intriguing piece of writing. I liked how you drew us I to the story and then left us wanting more ! Be careful to check your punctuation as some of your sentences are a bit long.To improve your writing, try to vary your sentence openers rather than using the first person so often. Well done.
wow that sounded sooooooo cool and scary talking about a dead person