Oh my goodness Jayanna, I love the way you totally turned things on their head in this story. You used vary sentence lengths effectively to build up the tension. Well done
Next time remember to check your punctuation.
Great stuff, I enjoyed reading this.
Miss A
What an exciting piece of writing ! I was able to picture the whole situation through your use of description , sentences and punctuation. Well Done
Mrs K
Oh my goodness Jayanna, I love the way you totally turned things on their head in this story. You used vary sentence lengths effectively to build up the tension. Well done
Next time remember to check your punctuation.
Great stuff, I enjoyed reading this.
Miss A
wow Jayanna, that was a amazing story. you used have used commas. I like the way u used some different sentence openers, well done.
by:Amina
What an exciting piece of writing ! I was able to picture the whole situation through your use of description , sentences and punctuation. Well Done
Mrs K