Very good sasha but there were a few speeling mistakes but other than that very good!
sasha very good, but when it says I wonder why you should have done a question mark but very very good
I like the way you have described the man next time maybe you could add in some similes overall very good
I like your use of adjectives maybe next time you could add some questions check on your spellings.
I like how you described him and made him sound mysterious, maybe you could use better sentence openers.
I like your descriptive writing and your adjectives. maybe you could of added a question
that is a scary demond
that was really good. you have really explained his daily life, but yet if you would like to improve you could add some more metaphors.
wow that is amazing I love your simile his eyes were as red as blood look at your commas when you take a breath.
the description helps me understand who he really is. Next time you should vary your sentence structures.
🙂 Great humor and description. Try to use the rule of 3.
I liked your description. I liked your descriptive words. I think you put a bit to much description.
I liked your description. I liked your descriptive words. I think you could have used a bit more description.
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Very good sasha but there were a few speeling mistakes but other than that very good!
sasha very good,
but when it says I wonder why you should have done a question mark
but very very good
I like the way you have described the man next time maybe you could add in some similes overall very good
I like your use of adjectives
maybe next time you could add some questions
check on your spellings.
I like how you described him and made him sound mysterious, maybe you could use better sentence openers.
I like your descriptive writing and your adjectives.
maybe you could of added a question
that is a scary demond
that was really good. you have really explained his daily life, but yet if you would like to improve you could add some more metaphors.
wow that is amazing I love your simile his eyes were as red as blood
look at your commas when you take a breath.
the description helps me understand who he really is.
Next time you should vary your sentence structures.
🙂 Great humor and description. Try to use the rule of 3.
I liked your description.
I liked your descriptive words.
I think you put a bit to much description.
I liked your description.
I liked your descriptive words.
I think you could have used a bit more description.