the man in the forest

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13 Responses to the man in the forest

  1. kudhn says:

    Very good sasha but there were a few speeling mistakes but other than that very good!

  2. ferdm says:

    sasha very good,
    but when it says I wonder why you should have done a question mark
    but very very good

  3. asarm says:

    I like the way you have described the man next time maybe you could add in some similes overall very good

  4. adamk says:

    I like your use of adjectives
    maybe next time you could add some questions
    check on your spellings.

  5. bhuiz says:

    I like how you described him and made him sound mysterious, maybe you could use better sentence openers.

  6. shaiz says:

    I like your descriptive writing and your adjectives.
    maybe you could of added a question

  7. emmae says:

    that is a scary demond

  8. dhang says:

    that was really good. you have really explained his daily life, but yet if you would like to improve you could add some more metaphors.

  9. gibsj says:

    wow that is amazing I love your simile his eyes were as red as blood
    look at your commas when you take a breath.

  10. tavah says:

    the description helps me understand who he really is.
    Next time you should vary your sentence structures.

  11. hossr says:

    🙂 Great humor and description. Try to use the rule of 3.

  12. balea says:

    I liked your description.
    I liked your descriptive words.
    I think you put a bit to much description.

  13. balea says:

    I liked your description.
    I liked your descriptive words.
    I think you could have used a bit more description.

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