Olimaron this was great! I really love all your description and use of simile, you really helped me to understand just how bad your villain is. Don’t forget to write in clear sentences marked with full stops, not writing in capitals will help.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
cant wait for more just need to check your spelling
Thanks for the feedback you gave me. 🙂
nice similes but next time you could check your punctuation
I think you should have wrote red and hot instead of as red as hot!
You should have wrote in different colours!
Olimaron this was great! I really love all your description and use of simile, you really helped me to understand just how bad your villain is. Don’t forget to write in clear sentences marked with full stops, not writing in capitals will help.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
Good work!!!!!!!!!:):):)