well done, you used special words to create an atmosphere
I hate to be picky but when you wrote un-expectingly without a capital!
so……
I would saycheck your work carefully
Rhia
Lovely atmosphere the setting description puts me into Laszlo’s shoes which gives a variety of sympathetic feelings and emotions for him my tummy slightly tickled towards the end within the portal but next time try using your literacy devices within your excellent story. Good job and keep up the good work. Sincerely and kind regards Kaaruni
I loved the way you used many rhetorical questions and remember to put inverted commas in the right places.
Rithika
well done you have used puntcutaion but you need to work on your description
well done you have used description now you need to make sence
well done, you used special words to create an atmosphere
I hate to be picky but when you wrote un-expectingly without a capital!
so……
I would saycheck your work carefully
Rhia
you missed a capital letter but well done you done great description
well done you have separated your paragraphs well 🙁 🙁
Lovely atmosphere the setting description puts me into Laszlo’s shoes which gives a variety of sympathetic feelings and emotions for him my tummy slightly tickled towards the end within the portal but next time try using your literacy devices within your excellent story. Good job and keep up the good work. Sincerely and kind regards Kaaruni
Well done you have used powerful words. Next time check your work carefully.