That was really good, I like the beginning it was really effective to read. if you wanted to improve you can add a bit more because I wanted to carry on reading (that is how good it was) and you can explain every event a bit more otherwise it was fantastic 🙂
I like it but its quite short, I wanted
to read more but unfortunately I couldn’t but overall fantastic words
Ok thanks
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That was really good, I like the beginning it was really effective to read. if you wanted to improve you can add a bit more because I wanted to carry on reading (that is how good it was) and you can explain every event a bit more otherwise it was fantastic 🙂
thank you I will see if I can write more
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