Great stuff Safwan, you have clear beginning and end to your story and have used the past tense well. Remember to include enough detail in the middle so your reader understands the link
I was impressed that you, very creatively, choose to approach this writing task in a different way to many other children. “The Goalie Curse” was a great idea, just make sure when you write in a more unique way, the reader can understand and follow the idea. I enjoyed reading this, well done.
Great stuff Safwan, you have clear beginning and end to your story and have used the past tense well. Remember to include enough detail in the middle so your reader understands the link
I was impressed that you, very creatively, choose to approach this writing task in a different way to many other children. “The Goalie Curse” was a great idea, just make sure when you write in a more unique way, the reader can understand and follow the idea. I enjoyed reading this, well done.
that was hilarious
I like the way you wrote the story and it was really funny.