Jinan there are some moments of real genius here and I love the way you used repetition and referred to previous events to emphasise. The end felt a bit confused, using paragraph will make your ideas clearer. Mrs M
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Jinan there are some moments of real genius here and I love the way you used repetition and referred to previous events to emphasise.
The end felt a bit confused, using paragraph will make your ideas clearer.
Mrs M