Hi Mia,
What a wonderful way to introduce a new character into the story by echoing elements form the beginning; this is the kind of trick talented authors use! You also used detail to influence my opinion in a clever way.
Next time remember to write in clear paragraphs.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
Hi Mia,
What a wonderful way to introduce a new character into the story by echoing elements form the beginning; this is the kind of trick talented authors use! You also used detail to influence my opinion in a clever way.
Next time remember to write in clear paragraphs.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M