Hi Rehana
I love how u have described the place its really descriptive and you have used great punctuation
however some of it doesn’t make sense like u said: I scream for her, but it should be I screamed for her.
my advice would be that next time read back at your work and u could put in some similes or even better metopher.
Hi Rehana
I love how u have described the place its really descriptive and you have used great punctuation
however some of it doesn’t make sense like u said: I scream for her, but it should be I screamed for her.
my advice would be that next time read back at your work and u could put in some similes or even better metopher.
by maleeha