Nice work Imaan, I like the way you made your work expressive on how you would feel and you made it emotive. You also made me feel some emotion. Next time use less repetition in your work
Imaan that was really good I like the way you used a semi colon and some big words I really like it when you used emotional language because you used creative writing.
Nice story, I felt really emotional and you used great vocabulary. Next time you can add a rule of three of you can add it in your story.
By lakshithaa.
Nice work Imaan, I like the way you made your work expressive on how you would feel and you made it emotive. You also made me feel some emotion. Next time use less repetition in your work
Zaeem:p
thanks for the expression complement and the advice
Well done, Imaan for entering this week’s 100wc. I’m impressed with some of the vocabulary you have used e.g. hotfooting and excrement.
You have sensibly used the prompt phrase to remember those soldiers who fight for countries.
Remember though to proofread your work so that you don’t forget capital letters. I can see quite a few missing.
I hope you continue to enter the 100wc.
Thank you i find your advice very helpful and it helps me to check more!
also tank you for your comment on the words i used!!
wow imaan I liked the language you used like horrostrucked and loathsome.
Imaan that was really good I like the way you used a semi colon and some big words I really like it when you used emotional language because you used creative writing.