Zobi, you’ve you’ve lots of exciting description to create tension in your story and I can see that you’ve worked hard to punctuate but you need to keep checking that until the end.
Miss A
I agree with Miss A, Zobi, remember to re-read your work to see that it looks right and makes sense. Sometime it helps to read it out loud to yourself or you could read it out loud to a friend.
Zobi, you’ve you’ve lots of exciting description to create tension in your story and I can see that you’ve worked hard to punctuate but you need to keep checking that until the end.
Miss A
I agree with Miss A, Zobi, remember to re-read your work to see that it looks right and makes sense. Sometime it helps to read it out loud to yourself or you could read it out loud to a friend.