What a mystery you have constructed, Surabhi, using well selected adjectives, prepositional and adverbial phrases, all well punctuated. Opening with a short three word statement is very effective at setting the scene.
Just be careful of using the objective form ‘me’ where you should use the subjective ‘I’ (Clover, Samantha and I…)
All in all a great read – well done!
Mrs Speirs (Team 100wc)
What a mystery you have constructed, Surabhi, using well selected adjectives, prepositional and adverbial phrases, all well punctuated. Opening with a short three word statement is very effective at setting the scene.
Just be careful of using the objective form ‘me’ where you should use the subjective ‘I’ (Clover, Samantha and I…)
All in all a great read – well done!
Mrs Speirs (Team 100wc)
WOW!!!!!!!
I love your amazing use of vocabulary and your amazing story keep it up!
imaan
Great mood Surabhi, by the way just check the word porthole because it is spelt PORTAL. Zaeem
well done Surabhi, a good use of descriptive language and linking the story together keep it up.