nice story. next time maybe you can break up your longer sentences into shorter sentences that each captures one thought. For example, “I was at the airport. My plane just arrived. I was so excited because it is my first time on a plane. When the plane was in the air, i saw a spark on [the] wing. Suddenly, the plane dropped. Everyone was panicking. I was so scared.” Keep practicing, and keep up the good work!
nice story. next time maybe you can break up your longer sentences into shorter sentences that each captures one thought. For example, “I was at the airport. My plane just arrived. I was so excited because it is my first time on a plane. When the plane was in the air, i saw a spark on [the] wing. Suddenly, the plane dropped. Everyone was panicking. I was so scared.” Keep practicing, and keep up the good work!