Fascinating Story Surabhi, I like the emotional language to create an affect to really bring the reader deep into the tragic event. I love the last line mainly when you put ‘ I remember going back on the 11th of November. Remember Me.’ That part is good. Reading your work is lovely, you have used some powerful adjective to create the mood.
A very well done.
By: Esha Patel
Amazing work Surabhi, I really like your work, its because you have used powerful connectives, you have made me feel like I was in WW1 or World War 1. -Karolina. T 😀
I really liked your work. you have used lots of adjectives and really great phrases. next time you could use onomatopia if you have words to spare. the line” I remember going back on the 11th of November. remember me.” was really emotional, you have really used powerful adjectives to creat a mood.
Great sentiment to this moving piece of writing Surabhi, I loved your personal touches that made me feel more empathy for this soldier. Keep up the great work!
Great work surabhi . I liked your work very much and you have great detail Well Done
Layla Fray 21
Fascinating Story Surabhi, I like the emotional language to create an affect to really bring the reader deep into the tragic event. I love the last line mainly when you put ‘ I remember going back on the 11th of November. Remember Me.’ That part is good. Reading your work is lovely, you have used some powerful adjective to create the mood.
A very well done.
By: Esha Patel
Amazing work Surabhi, I really like your work, its because you have used powerful connectives, you have made me feel like I was in WW1 or World War 1. -Karolina. T 😀
I really liked your work. you have used lots of adjectives and really great phrases. next time you could use onomatopia if you have words to spare. the line” I remember going back on the 11th of November. remember me.” was really emotional, you have really used powerful adjectives to creat a mood.
by : lakshithaa sutharsan
Great sentiment to this moving piece of writing Surabhi, I loved your personal touches that made me feel more empathy for this soldier. Keep up the great work!