Great use of a cliff-hanger to leave your reader wondering what happened next; I also loved how you used interesting detail, such as ‘purple fire’ and ‘unknown gender’ to pull me in and paint and interesting picture for me. Lets word at making every word count, think about how you could avoid repeating information so you can tell your reader more.
Did Storm speak? Did Storm attack? Did Storm smile? I’d love to find out. By leaving your entry open at the end you got me thinking. That’s a great achievement, well done and good luck for future entries.
Mr Eitel-Smith, Pewithall Primary, Runcorn, England and Team 100wc
Well done – I was worried that nothing would change Lord Nulth but it seems that Storm the cute dragon might just save the day… (At least I hope this is what happens and that Storm is safe.)
I would really like to know what happens next.
Keep up your writing.
Mrs Williams (Team 100wc) Leicester
Great use of a cliff-hanger to leave your reader wondering what happened next; I also loved how you used interesting detail, such as ‘purple fire’ and ‘unknown gender’ to pull me in and paint and interesting picture for me. Lets word at making every word count, think about how you could avoid repeating information so you can tell your reader more.
Thank you Miss. Anand! I will 🙂
Did Storm speak? Did Storm attack? Did Storm smile? I’d love to find out. By leaving your entry open at the end you got me thinking. That’s a great achievement, well done and good luck for future entries.
Mr Eitel-Smith, Pewithall Primary, Runcorn, England and Team 100wc
Well done – I was worried that nothing would change Lord Nulth but it seems that Storm the cute dragon might just save the day… (At least I hope this is what happens and that Storm is safe.)
I would really like to know what happens next.
Keep up your writing.
Mrs Williams (Team 100wc) Leicester