Am reading this all the way from Bahrain! We’ll done, Hamzah! I can tell you have tried really hard to use descriptive language to bring your story to life! I hope you write more so we can find out what happens!
Hi Hamzah, this is a great piece of fantasy writing. You have used wonderful vocabulary, words like , pathetic, illuminated and heartlessly. I like the way you ended with a question. It leaves the reader wondering what is going to happen next? Well done.
Wow Hamzah! Fantastic use of a cliff-hanger and I loved all your precise vocabulary. Keep it up, I want to read more!
Great use of descriptive words Hamzah, keep up the good work!!!
A really cool piece of work, very descriptive and insightful. 🙂
Am reading this all the way from Bahrain! We’ll done, Hamzah! I can tell you have tried really hard to use descriptive language to bring your story to life! I hope you write more so we can find out what happens!
Hi Hamzah, this is a great piece of fantasy writing. You have used wonderful vocabulary, words like , pathetic, illuminated and heartlessly. I like the way you ended with a question. It leaves the reader wondering what is going to happen next? Well done.