Wow ! What an action packed story Zoby. I liked the way you used varied sentence lengths to create effects. Remember to make clear which character you are referring to.
Excellent story Zoby. Remember to refer back to the characters so as it is clear to the reader who you are talking about.
Keep up the good work!
Miss Heappey (Team 100WC)
Wow ! What an action packed story Zoby. I liked the way you used varied sentence lengths to create effects. Remember to make clear which character you are referring to.
Wow – really impressed with your work. Sounds very frightening and I am keen to know what happens next…. Keep it up.
Excellent story Zoby. Remember to refer back to the characters so as it is clear to the reader who you are talking about.
Keep up the good work!
Miss Heappey (Team 100WC)