luminous bike by Yunus

4 Responses to luminous bike by Yunus

1. chouz1 says:

   January 22, 2020 at 9:49 am

   It was very evocative and I liked it very much. I especially liked the parts when you got quick flashbacks.

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2. Mrs Moore says:

   January 22, 2020 at 2:55 pm

   Hi Yunus,

   I really enjoyed reading your writing; you really drew me and made me feel the pain of your memories. Next time make sure that you check your punctuation before you publish. Great job! You really left me wanting to read more
   Mrs Moore

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3. Shobbir says:

   January 24, 2020 at 10:13 pm

   Hi Yunus,

   Great to see you expressing your thoughts and emotions through writing – it’s a very nice piece! One small bit of advice would be to perhaps add more detail in order to help more clearly convey your ideas.

   Dad

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4. Karin Poole Team 100 VA Beach, USA says:

   January 26, 2020 at 6:36 pm

   Hi Yunus,

   This was an awesome piece of descriptive writing; you made some really cool word choices and kept me gripped. Careful you don’t rush the end so that you finish as well as you start.
   Looking forward to seeing what you write next.
   Karin Poole
   Team 100
   VA Beach
   USA

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