Hi Brindan,
I can see that you really tried to use lots of exciting vocabulary in your story and used the narrative voice to draw your reader in. Next time try to make sure the words fit the context in which you are using them. Mrs Moore
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Hi Brindan,
I can see that you really tried to use lots of exciting vocabulary in your story and used the narrative voice to draw your reader in. Next time try to make sure the words fit the context in which you are using them.
Mrs Moore