LA by Robert Maries

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3 Responses to LA by Robert Maries

  1. vacia says:

    weird thoughts rob but kinda cool if you actually think about it

  2. nanand says:

    Hi Robert,
    This was a very unusual way to respond to the prompt and showed some great imagination. I wonder how heavy that house was and what happened next to Noah. Try not to write exactly as you speak.
    Mrs M

  3. Cath (Team100, Melbourne, Australia) says:

    Hello Robert, I like how you created ideas that might have explained why the house felt as if it was being lifted up. I really like the image you created of the boy trying to hold onto his house. Additional punctuation would have helped make your story clearer. Great ideas, though.

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