Well done – there is a lot happening in this story and your reader really has to concentrate on events. There is lots of tension and several twists. I like your very short and poignant final sentence. Jane Team 100WC Barnsley UK
I absolutely love the words you have used and how you said’ ‘mummy daddy is that you?”
remember to not just say I cried add something to really make your reader think!!
Well done – there is a lot happening in this story and your reader really has to concentrate on events. There is lots of tension and several twists. I like your very short and poignant final sentence. Jane Team 100WC Barnsley UK
I absolutely love the words you have used and how you said’ ‘mummy daddy is that you?”
remember to not just say I cried add something to really make your reader think!!
imaanxx