Hi Lakshithaa, thank you for entering the 100WC this week, there are almost 1500 entries so far!
What I like about your work…
You have created mystery in your writing.
You have used a question to make your readers think.
What I would love to see next time…
Do you think that you could try to start your sentences in different ways.
e.g.
Sadly, it reminded me of…
Devastated, my heart sank…
What do you think?
Well done and keep writing. 🙂
Mrs Tucker (100WC Team)
Wirral, UK.
Hello Lakshithaa. I like the tension you provide for the reader by telling us that you initially thought the noise was funny, but then it began to scare you.
Be careful with your use of commas in your future writing won’t you.
I hope you enjoy writing. Thanks for sharing.
Hi Lakshithaa, thank you for entering the 100WC this week, there are almost 1500 entries so far!
What I like about your work…
You have created mystery in your writing.
You have used a question to make your readers think.
What I would love to see next time…
Do you think that you could try to start your sentences in different ways.
e.g.
Sadly, it reminded me of…
Devastated, my heart sank…
What do you think?
Well done and keep writing. 🙂
Mrs Tucker (100WC Team)
Wirral, UK.
Hello Lakshithaa. I like the tension you provide for the reader by telling us that you initially thought the noise was funny, but then it began to scare you.
Be careful with your use of commas in your future writing won’t you.
I hope you enjoy writing. Thanks for sharing.
Hi lakshithaa
I liked the vocabulary that you have used to creat a mood for the reader. Next time check your commas and work on more grown up adjectives.
I would really liked to know what happens next.
Keep writing