cool adem i was really hooked up onto your start. i like how you used adjectives to describe the park . next time use more adjective for me to have a shiver running down my spine!
by janna , your best freind
I liked the suspense that keeps us glued to your writing but you need to think of other ways to start sentences. Well done Mum
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cool adem i was really hooked up onto your start. i like how you used adjectives to describe the
park . next time use more adjective for me to have a shiver running down my spine!
by janna , your best freind
I liked the suspense that keeps us glued to your writing but you need to think of other ways to start sentences.
Well done
Mum