This version of your story was much clearer; I can imagine just how sad the children would have been to lose their books. Watch your pronouns as you are mixing between ‘it’ and ‘they’.
Well done Andrei, I can see real progress in your writing.
Hello Andrei,
Thank you so much for sharing your writing on 100WC.
I love books so understand completely how sad your characters were to lose theirs. I have never had a book with a diamond on it though! Very precious.
I hope to see more of your work being shared
Hi Andrei,
This version of your story was much clearer; I can imagine just how sad the children would have been to lose their books. Watch your pronouns as you are mixing between ‘it’ and ‘they’.
Well done Andrei, I can see real progress in your writing.
Mrs Moore
Hello Andrei,
Thank you so much for sharing your writing on 100WC.
I love books so understand completely how sad your characters were to lose theirs. I have never had a book with a diamond on it though! Very precious.
I hope to see more of your work being shared