Hi Pasupathi,
You’ve made great use of the narrator’s voice, action and thoughts to draw me into your writing, you also made good use of different sentence lengths to create effects. Next time try to use synonyms to avoid repetition; what else could you use for block?
Well done.
Mrs Moore
Pasupathi,
You had me on the edge of my seat. Your use of short sentences made me feel the urgency for your character and my heart raced on with my eyes across the text. Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA
Hi Pasupathi,
You’ve made great use of the narrator’s voice, action and thoughts to draw me into your writing, you also made good use of different sentence lengths to create effects. Next time try to use synonyms to avoid repetition; what else could you use for block?
Well done.
Mrs Moore
Pasupathi,
You had me on the edge of my seat. Your use of short sentences made me feel the urgency for your character and my heart raced on with my eyes across the text. Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA