Hi Rayyan,
I can see you’ve acted on your feedback and sorted out the layout of your writing , well done. My next target would be to think about punctuation; could you use a question mark and exclamation mark to improve this?
Hello Rayyan,
This was quite a response to the prompt this week; your main character has certainly had quite a difficult life. I hope he gets out of the pickle he seems to be in. Making your reader feel empathy is something talented writers do.
Keep on writing.
Max Bradley
Manchester
Team 100
Hi Rayyan,
I can see you’ve acted on your feedback and sorted out the layout of your writing , well done. My next target would be to think about punctuation; could you use a question mark and exclamation mark to improve this?
Keep it up.
Mrs Moore
Hello Rayyan,
This was quite a response to the prompt this week; your main character has certainly had quite a difficult life. I hope he gets out of the pickle he seems to be in. Making your reader feel empathy is something talented writers do.
Keep on writing.
Max Bradley
Manchester
Team 100