Hi Zobi, an interesting piece of writing for this week’s 100 word challenge. I agree that you used some good description: louder and louder; sweating with fear. I wonder how the boat got into the park and then there were zombies – think carefully about your ideas and how they all link together.
Thank you for sharing your writing.
Mrs Williams (Team 100WC) Leicester
Zobi, you used lots of wonderful description to draw me into your story , shame you forgot about punctuation.
Hi Zobi, an interesting piece of writing for this week’s 100 word challenge. I agree that you used some good description: louder and louder; sweating with fear. I wonder how the boat got into the park and then there were zombies – think carefully about your ideas and how they all link together.
Thank you for sharing your writing.
Mrs Williams (Team 100WC) Leicester