Well done, this was another excellent short piece of writing, it wounds like your main character had a wonderful experience. I loved the way you used precise descriptive language to create an atmosphere for your reader. Remember we use the past perfect (had+past participle) to talk about the past of the past.
Keep on writing, you clearly have a talent for it.
This is a fantastic piece. You are very good at writing stories. I really enjoyed reading this and can’t wait to read more pieces of yours.
Keep writing – perhaps even longer stories by yourself!
Congratulations on your response to the week’s prompt Furqaan. Your use of descriptive language meant that I could easily picture the scene. I’m not sure I would relax if I was on the branch of a tree – even if it was strong! I enjoyed reading your writing this week. Thank you.
I absolutely love sunsets so I really enjoyed your writing for this week’s 100 word challenge. You created a very special atmosphere in your writing as you described setting out to find the “ideal spot” and that “he had been waiting for this moment for all his life”. I really liked how you linked your story back to when your character was a young boy and heard about the sunsets in the Swiss Alps. Great writing! Well done.
Máire O’Keeffe (Team 100wc)
This is a really great story. No wonder you got into the showcase. Next time I would like to say you should use paragraphs. But other than that what a great story and are you talking about the view in the picture above? I would love to see more of your 100 word challenges.
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