the terror of halloween

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5 Responses to the terror of halloween

  1. nanand says:

    Hi Shayaan,
    What a spooky response to the prompt this week; you’ve created quite an atmosphere for your reader and leave me wanting to know more. Your formatting makes this a bit of a difficult read, could you edit this?
    Stay safe.
    Mrs M

  2. Cath (Team100, Melbourne, Australia) says:

    Hi Shayaan, scary! I really like how you go from calmness (fun of trick and treating) to scary (mystery and people who had died). You were able to create quite a mystery and then just when I thought everyone was safe, you provided the blood trail and note. That was a shock and really grabbed my interest. Well done.

  3. Mrs P (Team 100WC) says:

    Hi Shayann
    I enjoyed the way you used this prompt as part of your 100WC, rather than describing it. You have written about a normal situation, with a twist at the end. This is a great way to keep the reader engaged and interested. Well done.
    Mrs P (Team 100WC)
    Wellington, New Zealand

  4. Terry Team 100WC UK says:

    Hi Shayaan
    I really like the way your story doesn’t mention the picture at all but you use words to create your own imagery, and there is plenty of it. It felt a bit like reading scene directions for a film. well done.

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