Hi Shayaan,
What a spooky response to the prompt this week; you’ve created quite an atmosphere for your reader and leave me wanting to know more. Your formatting makes this a bit of a difficult read, could you edit this?
Stay safe.
Mrs M
Hi Shayaan, scary! I really like how you go from calmness (fun of trick and treating) to scary (mystery and people who had died). You were able to create quite a mystery and then just when I thought everyone was safe, you provided the blood trail and note. That was a shock and really grabbed my interest. Well done.
Hi Shayann
I enjoyed the way you used this prompt as part of your 100WC, rather than describing it. You have written about a normal situation, with a twist at the end. This is a great way to keep the reader engaged and interested. Well done.
Mrs P (Team 100WC)
Wellington, New Zealand
Hi Shayaan
I really like the way your story doesn’t mention the picture at all but you use words to create your own imagery, and there is plenty of it. It felt a bit like reading scene directions for a film. well done.
Hi Shayaan,
What a spooky response to the prompt this week; you’ve created quite an atmosphere for your reader and leave me wanting to know more. Your formatting makes this a bit of a difficult read, could you edit this?
Stay safe.
Mrs M
Thank you for liking my story I used quite a lot of effort in this:)
Hi Shayaan, scary! I really like how you go from calmness (fun of trick and treating) to scary (mystery and people who had died). You were able to create quite a mystery and then just when I thought everyone was safe, you provided the blood trail and note. That was a shock and really grabbed my interest. Well done.
Hi Shayann
I enjoyed the way you used this prompt as part of your 100WC, rather than describing it. You have written about a normal situation, with a twist at the end. This is a great way to keep the reader engaged and interested. Well done.
Mrs P (Team 100WC)
Wellington, New Zealand
Hi Shayaan
I really like the way your story doesn’t mention the picture at all but you use words to create your own imagery, and there is plenty of it. It felt a bit like reading scene directions for a film. well done.