The surprise by Pasupathi Sivaruban

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3 Responses to The surprise by Pasupathi Sivaruban

  1. nanand says:

    Hi Pasupathi,

    This sounds like quite a celebration and definitely memorable on so many counts. I like the way you used questions and varied sentence lengths to draw me into your writing. Remember to check your verbs are in the correct tense before you publish.

    Mrs M

  2. Cath (Team100, Melbourne, Australia) says:

    Hello Pasupathi, what a great opening to your story. It immediately made me interested and wanting to read on. The questions you continue to ask just add to the mystery. Then you add the twist of it being a birthday celebration. Well done.

  3. Mrs P (Team 100WC) says:

    Hi Pasupathi
    I love how you used the prompt in this 100WC. It is part of the story so naturally. The short sentences you have used kept up the pace of the story which keeps the reader engaged. The ending was unexpected, which is always a nice treat for the reader! Well done.
    Mrs P (Team 100WC)
    Wellington, New Zealand

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