This was a great read and reminded me of when I was little and used to get nightmares. Your fantastic choice of vocabulary really helped to create the mood. Next time try to use varied sentences to create effects.
Well done Brindan, I can see real progress in your writing and a strong authorial voice emerging.
Hi Brindan
Your 100WC is really exciting. Your vocabulary choices added to the atmosphere of the story. The ending was a surprise for the reader, as I am sure it was for George! Great job.
Mrs P (Team 100WC)
Wellington, New Zealand
Hi Brindan,
This was a great read and reminded me of when I was little and used to get nightmares. Your fantastic choice of vocabulary really helped to create the mood. Next time try to use varied sentences to create effects.
Well done Brindan, I can see real progress in your writing and a strong authorial voice emerging.
Mrs M
Hi Brindan
Your 100WC is really exciting. Your vocabulary choices added to the atmosphere of the story. The ending was a surprise for the reader, as I am sure it was for George! Great job.
Mrs P (Team 100WC)
Wellington, New Zealand