Hi Pasupathi,
This sounds like an horrific game! I hope you don’t get sick! Well done, I can really see that you have developed your writer’s voice and you really draw me into your writing and used short sentences really well to create tension. Your penultimate sentence is a little too long; can you edit it?
Hi Pasupathi,
Well done on your story this week, I think you noticed that it didn’t have the prompt in it! Not to worry you’ve done a good job anyway. I don’t like the sound of the game though!
Ms Brennock
Team 100 w/c
Dublin
Hi Pasupathi,
This sounds like an horrific game! I hope you don’t get sick! Well done, I can really see that you have developed your writer’s voice and you really draw me into your writing and used short sentences really well to create tension. Your penultimate sentence is a little too long; can you edit it?
Stay safe.
Mrs M
Hi, Mrs. Moore I forgot to add the prompt into my writing, I sent it again with the prompt.
Hi Pasupathi,
Well done on your story this week, I think you noticed that it didn’t have the prompt in it! Not to worry you’ve done a good job anyway. I don’t like the sound of the game though!
Ms Brennock
Team 100 w/c
Dublin