Well done on completing your writing task. You have used some great description to help me get a clear picture in my mind; I especially liked your comparison between the eggs and helmets. Don’t forget all parts of the proper noun need capital so it should read’ Hyde Park’.
Hello Hidit, what a great picture of the dinosaur to go with your story. I really liked your description of the air, (fresh and delicate) and how this came just before, “Suddenly”. This made me, as a reader, sit up and pay attention. I wanted to read on and see what would happen next. What an experience it would be to find a live dinosaur! I think the choice of using the word “astounded” was a good one. Well done.
Hi Hidit,
Well done on completing your writing task. You have used some great description to help me get a clear picture in my mind; I especially liked your comparison between the eggs and helmets. Don’t forget all parts of the proper noun need capital so it should read’ Hyde Park’.
Keep up the great work.
Mrs Moore
Hello Hidit, what a great picture of the dinosaur to go with your story. I really liked your description of the air, (fresh and delicate) and how this came just before, “Suddenly”. This made me, as a reader, sit up and pay attention. I wanted to read on and see what would happen next. What an experience it would be to find a live dinosaur! I think the choice of using the word “astounded” was a good one. Well done.