Well done for editing your piece and now including the prompt. This doesn’t sound like a very nice game, I’m not sure I would play it. You did a great job of creating a sinister atmosphere with your careful word choices. Moving on I would think about organising your work into clear paragraphs.
Hi Pasupathi,
Well done for editing your piece and now including the prompt. This doesn’t sound like a very nice game, I’m not sure I would play it. You did a great job of creating a sinister atmosphere with your careful word choices. Moving on I would think about organising your work into clear paragraphs.
Mrs Moore