the story

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2 Responses to the story

  1. nanand says:

    Hi Oliver,

    What a great way to respond to the prompt this week; you have a really strong writer’s voice that draws you into your writing.
    Keep on blogging.
    Mrs M

  2. Cath (Team100, Melbourne, Australia) says:

    Hello Oliver, what a bad start to the day! Sometimes it does just feel like that; that nothing will go right. Thankfully, the next day things are usually better. It was very clever how you used a rhetorical question, “…you have a problem with that?” Rhetorical questions can be a great tool to engage your reader. Your tree of life metaphor was also a clever use of language. I like how you used the “first person, I” throughout your story. It helped show that the character was unusual and the character was aware of how they were unusual. Well done.

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