Dear Janna,
Thank you for taking part in this week’s 100 Word Challenge writing prompt. What a unique idea to have the present be a time portal that transported Tom back in time! You used some great adjectives in this piece like silky red wrapper and a miniature boy. They really help your reader to get a clear picture in their mind of the story you are telling. Be sure to double check your punctuation before you publish your work because I do see a few mistakes. Keep up the good work!
Mrs. Schmidt (Team 100WC)
Grade 3 Teacher
Pennsylvania, USA
Hi Janna,
I felt quite sorry for Tom, considering he thought he was getting a 3DS and in fact he got thrown into a Celltic battle. I loved the description of the ‘silky red wrapper’ and the word ‘whorled’ was very apt, I could see the ‘whorling’ going on in my head. Good work- keep it up.
Fiona (Team 100WC)
thank you very much for replying to my story and also I will make it more awesome next time by putting more adjectives that I have caught in a author’s book !:)
Dear Janna,
Thank you for taking part in this week’s 100 Word Challenge writing prompt. What a unique idea to have the present be a time portal that transported Tom back in time! You used some great adjectives in this piece like silky red wrapper and a miniature boy. They really help your reader to get a clear picture in their mind of the story you are telling. Be sure to double check your punctuation before you publish your work because I do see a few mistakes. Keep up the good work!
Mrs. Schmidt (Team 100WC)
Grade 3 Teacher
Pennsylvania, USA
Hi Janna,
I felt quite sorry for Tom, considering he thought he was getting a 3DS and in fact he got thrown into a Celltic battle. I loved the description of the ‘silky red wrapper’ and the word ‘whorled’ was very apt, I could see the ‘whorling’ going on in my head. Good work- keep it up.
Fiona (Team 100WC)
nice adjectives and I liked it when tom had to battle and it was good when you involved his parents at the end in tears
thank you very much for replying to my story and also I will make it more awesome next time by putting more adjectives that I have caught in a author’s book !:)
hi janna loved your story you used all the five different words and adjectives. i think your the best writter ever.
from amina your class mate