Hello, I like how you lost the present. I think that shows how nervous you must have been at the party (not having any friends of your own and not having been to a party before). I think you were able to capture emotion really well in this story. One tip, though; “i” should be a capital “I” when used as a pronoun. Well done.
Hello, I like how you lost the present. I think that shows how nervous you must have been at the party (not having any friends of your own and not having been to a party before). I think you were able to capture emotion really well in this story. One tip, though; “i” should be a capital “I” when used as a pronoun. Well done.