Hello Yukta
What a great piece of description! You have chosen your words carefully for greet impact. I wonder if you could combine some of your shorted sentences together to give a little variety to the pace of your writing? I bet you could combine these two successfully to create some tension:
It was like walking through nature’s beautiful illusion. At the same time, it was dangerous.
I love your use of imagery, I can see that crescent shaped pond filled with diamonds and I want to sit by and watch it sparkle! Well done.
Mrs Badge (Team 100WC)
Leicester (in our second lockdown 🙁 ) , England
Hello Yukta
What a great piece of description! You have chosen your words carefully for greet impact. I wonder if you could combine some of your shorted sentences together to give a little variety to the pace of your writing? I bet you could combine these two successfully to create some tension:
It was like walking through nature’s beautiful illusion. At the same time, it was dangerous.
I love your use of imagery, I can see that crescent shaped pond filled with diamonds and I want to sit by and watch it sparkle! Well done.
Mrs Badge (Team 100WC)
Leicester (in our second lockdown 🙁 ) , England
Hi Yukta,
Another beautiful piece of descriptive writing. Now think about how you could use devices to create dramatic effects.
Mrs M