Great stuff Amaan! What a fabulous adventure for young Lucy to go on. I can see you worked hard to include all the words from the prompt in your Christmas story. Next time remember to put speech marks around the words that are spoken. Keep up the great work.
Miss A
London
PS Merry Christmas
It sounds like Lucy had a great time parting with Santa and the elves–I wish I could have been there as well! Very nice story to read. Be sure to include speech marks in your writing so the reader can more easily identify who is talking. Also, be sure to capitalize the letter “i”. Great work though!!
Woooooooooooow! That’s amazing Amaan I really like how you made Santa alive and I like how you use that semi-colon and the elves. Also the HUGE! Factory. You could’ve used a bit more description but still very good. Well Done!
Great stuff Amaan! What a fabulous adventure for young Lucy to go on. I can see you worked hard to include all the words from the prompt in your Christmas story. Next time remember to put speech marks around the words that are spoken. Keep up the great work.
Miss A
London
PS Merry Christmas
Hi Amaan,
It sounds like Lucy had a great time parting with Santa and the elves–I wish I could have been there as well! Very nice story to read. Be sure to include speech marks in your writing so the reader can more easily identify who is talking. Also, be sure to capitalize the letter “i”. Great work though!!
Joe Pasternak
Dublin, Ireland
Hi Amman you have a good story but you need to read your work for punctuation, you have made lots of mistakes.
Woooooooooooow! That’s amazing Amaan I really like how you made Santa alive and I like how you use that semi-colon and the elves. Also the HUGE! Factory. You could’ve used a bit more description but still very good. Well Done!
Hi Amaan, great story. Very exciting and interesting. Just be careful with grammar. Well done!!
From Kaisan