Great ideas Alex. I like that it was so descriptive and action-packed. You gave us a lot of details and show a lot of imagination. The lack of correct punctuation make it difficult to follow though. Read it out loud before you post and it will help you to determine where sentences should end and new ones begin. Good effort!
I like the plot of your story and I also like the words you used.
Great ideas Alex. I like that it was so descriptive and action-packed. You gave us a lot of details and show a lot of imagination. The lack of correct punctuation make it difficult to follow though. Read it out loud before you post and it will help you to determine where sentences should end and new ones begin. Good effort!