Hi Ratheena, I really enjoyed this story and am so glad that John found a friend in the end. I think you have described very well how scary the first day at school can be. I can see that you have thought very hard about the words you have used and especially like how ‘the wind brushed away his concerns’. Sentences like this can make a story much more interesting for the reader. Keep up the good work!
Hi Ratheena, I really enjoyed this story and am so glad that John found a friend in the end. I think you have described very well how scary the first day at school can be. I can see that you have thought very hard about the words you have used and especially like how ‘the wind brushed away his concerns’. Sentences like this can make a story much more interesting for the reader. Keep up the good work!
Thank You!