Thank you for entering this weeks 100 word challenge, you have produced a good piece of writing.
I really like the opening to your story as it makes the reader want to know what has happened and why the son needs to be protected.
Next time make sure you read through your piece of writing to make sure it makes sense- you have some really long sentences which could be split into shorter ones making it easier for the reader to read.
Well done and keep writing!
Thank you for entering this weeks 100 word challenge, you have produced a good piece of writing.
I really like the opening to your story as it makes the reader want to know what has happened and why the son needs to be protected.
Next time make sure you read through your piece of writing to make sure it makes sense- you have some really long sentences which could be split into shorter ones making it easier for the reader to read.
Well done and keep writing!