Ooh this story is creepy – a mixture of horror and ghost story!
I wonder if instead of writing ‘the others didn’t care’ whether ‘the others weren’t aware’ might have been more appropriate? But maybe they really didn’t care?
There are a few spelling mistakes but you write well and have created tension and suspense!
Hello Liyana,
Ooh this story is creepy – a mixture of horror and ghost story!
I wonder if instead of writing ‘the others didn’t care’ whether ‘the others weren’t aware’ might have been more appropriate? But maybe they really didn’t care?
There are a few spelling mistakes but you write well and have created tension and suspense!
Keep writing,
Mrs W, Team 100 Word Challenge,
United Kingdom.