I suspect your story is some sort of dream for, if it were real, it would be very unlikely. The worlds in our dreams can be fascinating places to explore when writing. Normal physical laws don’t apply as we are freed to slay evil, soar on the backs of dragons, or solve great mysteries. Well done.
I can see you have taken care with spelling and punctuation while sharing your story although I can make two suggestions. In your first sentence, you made use of a semi-colon (;) whereas a comma (,) would have been better. My second suggestion comes in your fourth last sentence… A massive rubber just like the one that I accidently jumped on.
This sentence is incomplete. Here is a possible sentence… A massive rubber, just like the one that I accidently jumped on, appeared in front of me.
Can you see why the change might be necessary?
I hope you can continue entering the 100WC. Writers with a good imagination should share their adventures with others.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Hello Chetan,
I suspect your story is some sort of dream for, if it were real, it would be very unlikely. The worlds in our dreams can be fascinating places to explore when writing. Normal physical laws don’t apply as we are freed to slay evil, soar on the backs of dragons, or solve great mysteries. Well done.
I can see you have taken care with spelling and punctuation while sharing your story although I can make two suggestions. In your first sentence, you made use of a semi-colon (;) whereas a comma (,) would have been better. My second suggestion comes in your fourth last sentence…
A massive rubber just like the one that I accidently jumped on.
This sentence is incomplete. Here is a possible sentence…
A massive rubber, just like the one that I accidently jumped on, appeared in front of me.
Can you see why the change might be necessary?
I hope you can continue entering the 100WC. Writers with a good imagination should share their adventures with others.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
ha ha ha ha ha, that’s so funny Chetan good work