Hello Amaan,
You have tried hard to include this week’s prompt into your writing. Well done.
I have especially liked your use of colour in this piece of writing.
I wondered whether you might check how many times you have used I in your writing to see if there may be other ways of starting the sentences.
Ms R. Orr Team100
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Hello Amaan,
You have tried hard to include this week’s prompt into your writing. Well done.
I have especially liked your use of colour in this piece of writing.
I wondered whether you might check how many times you have used I in your writing to see if there may be other ways of starting the sentences.
Ms R. Orr
Team100