I like the image of you running as fast as a cheetah. And what a thrilling sounding festival. I wonder what the fire was. Make sure you reread to check spelling and punctuation.
Great stuff Karo! You used feelings and descriptive language well to hook me into your story. I can see real progress in your writing. Remember to check you haven’t missed words out.
Miss A
I like the image of you running as fast as a cheetah. And what a thrilling sounding festival. I wonder what the fire was. Make sure you reread to check spelling and punctuation.
Great stuff Karo! You used feelings and descriptive language well to hook me into your story. I can see real progress in your writing. Remember to check you haven’t missed words out.
Miss A